Well written! 

Great writing, though it might have been nice to have more little moments early on that clearly engage with the player's given information (though I realize that may lead to some unfair favoritism). Perhaps include an Earthbound-style reference to the player's favorite food or another specific? Otherwise, it has engaging writing which flows very well! I also didn't notice any typos, which is great for a text-based game!

I thought it was a joke at first but it ended up being really well written, good job I'm not a huge fan of text based stuff but this is good. Great job!

I really liked the writing and was interested in the world, bummed it ended when it did! After getting all the details at the front I was hoping for a little more interactivity as well.

Perhaps a couple of puzzles thrown in to break up the story elements, these don't have to be complex, or perhaps some kind of stats for the player which the story might impact upon?

I can tell that its really well writen, but I wasn't really prepared to read a book, I like the ability to read more details.

If your going to take data from the player it might help if these play some kind of roles on story lines or have some kind of impact in the future.

Covers one of the themes quite well.