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| Criteria | Rank | Score* | Raw Score |
| Adherence to Theme | #34 | 3.181 | 3.263 |
| Flow & Clarity | #42 | 2.821 | 2.895 |
| Overall | #43 | 3.010 | 3.088 |
| Concepts & Originality | #48 | 3.027 | 3.105 |
Ranked from 19 ratings. Score is adjusted from raw score by the median number of ratings per game in the jam.
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Nice work for trying something a little different. I think there are a few places where the tenses are mixed up but I suck at grammar so who knows :)
I'll be honest, this feels like a first draft stream of consciousness piece. Sure, some of my favorite grimdark fictions are based on the casual moments in a wild setting, but feels like a single (drawn out) scene in a scooby doo play. The character's races are very artificial and have no bearing on who they are/what they want. The most climactic moment is a character using a piece of tuba to physically hit a ghost in the shin- which only creates more questions. My main advice though is to make sure your characters have motivation- our heroes have "nothing better to do" than to wander around the bandhall and we have no idea what the Elf Spirit was after except maybe it was a little frisky for some reason (The roles are reversed haha). With that in mind, you clearly have the capacity to be a great writer, and I'm eager to see what you bring to the next jam!
A fun idea of civilian life dealing with the crazy that goes on in this world.
Super fun story. Love how it looks at a smaller part of OPR. Not every story needs to be big battles.