Seconding the above comment about tense shifts. I've noticed this too and was just about to ask if it was something you wanted us to point out as I'm not sure how finalized the script is. There's also a few instances of perspective shift where the narration switches from "you" to "I" (and not in the way that seems intended when there are genuine shifts in the narrator), as well as typos. I'm happy to make a running list as I encounter them but since there's so much still to add with the other routes and backgrounds, I wanted to know how useful that information would really be to you at this time or if it would be better to wait until you've got the script as finalized as possible.










