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Mindless Escape - Nic Taylor OPR WRITING JAM 12's itch.io pageResults
| Criteria | Rank | Score* | Raw Score |
| Concepts & Originality | #4 | 4.104 | 4.211 |
| Flow & Clarity | #6 | 3.950 | 4.053 |
| Overall | #11 | 3.830 | 3.930 |
| Adherence to Theme | #26 | 3.437 | 3.526 |
Ranked from 19 ratings. Score is adjusted from raw score by the median number of ratings per game in the jam.
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Really great story! Thanks!
I love the concept! Robots made of people has to be my favourte kind if body horror. 5 stars
Really well done story! Not a lot of notes for me on this one, it had a good steady plot progression and was an engaging read. Obviously with the one page format it leaves pieces to the imagination that I would have liked filled in with the set up but that’s only because the rest pulled me in so much!
Concepts & Originality 5/5
The premise is interesting and the story was quite engaging. It kept me hooked to see what would happen. Well done!
Flow & Clarity 4/5
The story is well written, with evocative descriptions and good pacing. There are some slight grammatical mistakes and some dialogue that was a bit dense and made me stumble a bit. The former is a simple fix, the latter may just be a "me problem", rather than a story one.
Adherence to Theme 4/5
The story handles the theme in a pretty direct and interesting way. My only (minor) critique is that it's perhaps too direct and outright tells the reader what the "Creative Resources" are.
If you want to discuss any of my feedback/ratings, feel free to @ me on the OPR discord.
That was awesome! Loved the building tension and the desperation you were able to convey in such a short read!
Thank you! Tried to keep it moving :)
Wow, that hooked me in and what a ride! You managed to get that sense of rising panic so well and the pay-off at the end 👏 Really awesome.
Thank you!