I usually do not care for text-heavy games, especially jam games, because I always feel like I’m being confronted with a big wall o’ text where so much of it is just there to inflate a wordcount. So, I really like the writing in this: while there’s a lot of it, all of it feels vital to the feel and the narrative, and having the hypertext for looking at specific things gives me a feeling of agency in reading the different things, which is different than just having it all shoved my way.

I get the impression that it’s incomplete since once you get to the actual potion quaffing it’s just, like, a placeholder for what it’s going to be, and I’d love to see this get fleshed out and completed. (And maybe some artwork would be nice, but given the number of potion combinations, even writing text for all of them is going to be a challenge!)

i LOVE combinatorial explosions and i HAVE abandoned a game because i got too ambitious with them

also omg flora game!!  wild to see compacts just casually mentioned in a strawb game, these don't come up a lot

this is a solid writing style too.  casual but competent.  lovely.

this was my very first ending:

> Becomes a full-on dragon and makes you into a partial clone of them via eating you and then letting you meld out from their tummy.

and i cannot stress enough how much i would enjoy reading this written out in full lmao.  laser targeted.  direct hit

i don't have too much to say that hasn't been said already, the writing that's here is great!

i like the sort of way each page has its own nested subpages--this seems like a nice way to provide more context for the reader, similar to footnotes, etc. but i think they're used super effectively with the potion ingredients scene, where we can imagine ourselves taking out each ingredient from the box, then putting it back, and i love this specific line from the black key: "You're okay. You're great, in fact. So great that you're going to drop the key right now and grab something else. haha." just a super creative & fun way to have the page navigation work.

super good writing out of nowhere, wtf

u are doing us former warriors kids PROUD with this one

absolutely love the concept. the one thing i forsee being tricky is writing all (7 choose 3) endings. that's the exact forking problem that led me to simplify my twine; if you could pull it off, it'd be an absolute HELL of a feat.

as it is, this is very good. great aesthetic, and i love how you seamlessly integrated the link text into the description ^w^

Shame you didn't have time to write out all the endings. The writing was cute and well paced.

This is currently flagged as Windows-only, but Twine games are almost always playable in browser – I don’t see why this one wouldn’t be. I think if you upload the zip file you already have and mark it as “playable in the browser”, it will Just Work because your entrypoint is already “index.html”. Give it a look at https://twinery.org/cookbook/starting/twine2/publishing_on_itchio.html#step-3-uploading-project-files