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Submission - Broken Telephone Jam #10's itch.io pageResults
| Criteria | Rank | Score* | Raw Score |
| Creativity | #8 | 3.125 | 3.125 |
| Fit | #13 | 2.500 | 2.500 |
| Enjoyment | #14 | 2.625 | 2.625 |
| Quality | #14 | 2.750 | 2.750 |
| Overall | #14 | 2.750 | 2.750 |
Ranked from 8 ratings. Score is adjusted from raw score by the median number of ratings per game in the jam.
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https://gamecarpenter.bandcamp.com/track/gc-brokentelephonejam10
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Hmm, probably a mistake to save my own entry for last XD. I certainly could have pushed a few things really hard, where I didn't, and several things that I know that I purposefully did were too subtle so that without listening for it, I didn't hear them at all... And several things about some of the timings and tonalities that were bothering me, but I thought I was being silly about did in fact still bother me when I was listening to it XD.
And some of the things I did later on to add texture just weren't well thought out... and wow I could have done a lot more with instrumentation. The things I tried to push low into the mix weren't low enough, and I need to do a lot on mixing/mastering. So, I need to do about another dozen of these jams to start to catch up XD.
the church bells and organ…how creative!
XD Thanks. I drew inspiration from the sort of church-esque vibe of the picture for most of the instrument selection.
Loved the ominous moments in this, especially the ending. The middle section didn't work for me in the context of the rest of the piece, though I did enjoy it as its own separate thing. Definitely a very creative piece!
Yes, it is quite tonally different, you're right about that! Seems as good a time as any to discuss my interpretation, though feel free to ignore my rambling =P
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Section 1:
The two people meet in the forest, a woodsman who gathers food there, and the sister of the current king.
Enthralled by the beauty of nature, the princess implores him to let the stag be, which he does, and they grow close. (Panel 1)
Unfortunately, her stories of the lovely forest and the wonderous animals there lead to the king claiming ownership over it as the kings forest and banning all hunting there. However, the people who live in and around the forest rely on it for food, so they continue to hunt there clandestinely, causing tensions to rise. One day, the current king comes to explore the forest himself, and he is shot and dies there. It's unclear whether this is truly an act of aggression or a hunting accident, but it doesn't really matter.
The princess becomes the new ruler, and turns her face toward the kingdom, while the woodsman is armed with a bow and prepared to join the battle they know is likely to soon be upon them. (Panel 2)
Section 2:
The princess, now queen, at the insistence of her people and the guard, seek to drive out any hunters from the forest and take the woods by force, the hunters however need the food to keep their people fed. The hunters fight a fierce retreating battle using their knowledge of the woods to shoot down many of the men-at-arms from the castle, but eventually the much reduced forces of the better equipped men-at-arms encircle the hunters deep in the woods, leading to a chaotic battle, the end result of which being that nearly everyone is lost on both sides.
Section 3 (Panel 3):
The princess and the hunter meet again having both fled to a small chapel in the woods known to both of them. Each of them, knowing time is short put aside the events of the last few hours and greet each other as warmly as they can, the princess littered with arrows, and the hunter having sustained critical sword wounds. They comfort each other in their last moments, and the bell tolls.
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The result isn't as cohesive as I'd like - I think I was focusing on it more as story beats than an emotional journey, so hearing everyone's entries has been quite insightful XD.
Loved the ominous moments in this, especially the ending. The middle section didn't work for me in the context of the rest of the piece, though I did enjoy it as its own separate thing. Definitely a very creative piece!
I think the choir and bells are a good thematic fit for the church! Very nice!
Thank you!.. Good catch, yes, I wanted to convey the physical space with my instrument choices. The middle section is meant to cover the battle between the two factions that I thought was implied by the way the second panel (and the sword and bow from the first panel) lead into the third.
Thanks!.. Yes, the tempo I chose ended up making finding time for transitional language quite difficult XD. The middle section is meant to represent what I viewed as the tragic battle / war between them that I assume caused the outcome from the third panel.
The crashing sounds at the 1 minute mark and again at around 1:20 were very foreboding, which made for great storytelling! The middle part reminds me a bit of being chucked into a fight scene and the ending is the 'Game Over' outcome. Well done!
Thank you! It does have a very three-act feel about it doesn't it... With the pacing I went for, I more or less was trying to keep people in their seats during intermission by bringing in ballpark vendors, if you pardon the linguistic gymnastics. =P. That 2 minute time limit can definitely be pretty brutal XD.
Incredible! it rocked my world.
Thanks for your kind review, I'm glad you enjoyed it =]