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Very cool way of telling a story, could have used a little more tension perhaps. Nice one!

I enjoyed the format. Would love to see it developed more and see more of the story. 

I love the epistolary format, provides a very interesting point of view into the series of events that befell the Charybdis. I found myself becoming a bit confused at the voice; I'm not sure if all the narratives were relayed through all Charybdis crewmates or other, uninvolved parties. I really love the atmosphere and growing confusion and tension you're able to build through the scattered windows, though.

Well done on creating the mood and atmosphere - the tone of desperation carried through well.  I would have liked the 'Audio Log Unregistered Ship' section to have been a little clearer but really enjoyed Ensign Karimova's entry and the Hall of Legislature audio log sections.

I think this is a great example of leaving space in the story for the reader to fill in the gaps. It reminded me of the System Shock 2 style of narrative, so it gets a big thumbs up from me.

I won’t lie, I sometimes struggle to follow the journal entry format of story telling and this was no exception. That being said, I think this was a good attempt, I enjoyed you really working in the factions and their characteristics with just enough splash of details. Great job!

Great submission! I haven't come across many journal style entries yet this jam. Double points for showcasing the entire disaster in fewer words than most of us could write a quick encounter (me included)