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A Miss Better Than A Mile [AoF]'s itch.io pageResults
| Criteria | Rank | Score* | Raw Score |
| Adherence to Theme | #1 | 4.208 | 4.208 |
| Overall | #7 | 3.972 | 3.972 |
| Concepts & Originality | #12 | 4.042 | 4.042 |
| Flow & Clarity | #16 | 3.667 | 3.667 |
Ranked from 24 ratings. Score is adjusted from raw score by the median number of ratings per game in the jam.
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Oh yeah, this was delightful.
Loved the character work and overall story, though the battle with the swordsman dragged slightly.
Definitely one of my favorites.
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The Coroner's GambitThanks for the compliments! :)
I think I've read so much Black Library over the years, that I definitely wanted to include some fighting. Everything had been bouncing around in my head before I got anything down on paper - but was pretty surprised that it came out as the longest scene/section... In my head, it was balanced a bit more evenly across the whole story!
Really excellent pacing, and a fight scene that balances character exploration with physical actions very well. This is great.
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The Partheir's HostAwesome. My favorite yet. If you're not writing anything longer-form, it might be worth trying out.
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Mind and BodyInteresting stuff. It gives a different view of the Rats than I'm used to, which is nice. Big thumbs up.
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The Wisdom of ViolenceThank you! It's interesting, I think most of my pre-OPR exposure to ratmen was through GW Skaven and they're all underhand and sneaky - but the OPR short stories and background talks a lot more about nobility and self sacrifice so I didn't see any reason why they had to be anti-heroes. Cheers for the encouragement!
First one I'm seeing about a ratman. It is very good. I enjoyed the fact that an accident led to a good outcome. Gives me bob ross "happy little accident" vibes. I need the mc's luck. I can roll 20 dice and get 19 1's.
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Life After the PlagueThanks, I definitely wanted to make it feel like part of the OPR universe and there are a couple of short stories about Vinci vs Ratmen so I wanted to follow on from that. Vinci also come across as one of the more unique OPR factions.
Lol, like that time Bob spilt a bit of red and turned it into a mutilated corpse. :P
I quite liked this one. Very concise writing that makes great use of the limited format.
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Lessons in Hubris
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