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| Criteria | Rank | Score* | Raw Score |
| Adherence to Theme | #10 | 3.720 | 3.720 |
| Overall | #12 | 3.733 | 3.733 |
| Flow & Clarity | #15 | 3.680 | 3.680 |
| Concepts & Originality | #23 | 3.800 | 3.800 |
Ranked from 25 ratings. Score is adjusted from raw score by the median number of ratings per game in the jam.
Comments
Poor Squick! This was a good read and really made me empathize with the protagonist. The Borthers were a little one note, but you only had one page to work with, so playing into the archtype was probably your best move. Nicely done.
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Always Darkest (OPR Writing Jam 13)The characters are great in this story and you managed to tug at the heart strings in the final lines. Really well done. And I liked your approach to the theme, I thought it was cleverly done--clear without being explicit.
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Lightning and LogicReally fun escape sequence! I like that you maintained ambiguity whether he would survive or not. I choose to believe that the rats have the medical knowhow to treat his injuries :')I saw your comment on my story, and did chuckle at how structurally similar our stories are! I guess we just fund underdogs rallying against those big dumb Brothers compelling, haha. They're easy to dislike.
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The Partheir's HostI echo these other comments, I feel sad now. A really original read and story, I'm loving all the entries that tell a story about human needs, not just ENDLESS WAR. Thumbs up!
Also, love the story of a rat escaping a dangerous situation and using trickery to overcome a superior opponent and hey wait a minute, that's what my story is about :D
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A Miss Better Than A Mile [AoF]wow. I feel so bad the little pet rat is gonna be left on its own! Felt a connection with that little buddy. Love the story, good job.
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Life After the PlagueSad face. Don't you make me feel bad for rats. That was a great read.
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The Wisdom of Violence
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