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Broken Promises's itch.io pageResults
| Criteria | Rank | Score* | Raw Score |
| Flow & Clarity | #23 | 3.458 | 3.458 |
| Overall | #27 | 3.333 | 3.333 |
| Adherence to Theme | #29 | 3.000 | 3.000 |
| Concepts & Originality | #31 | 3.542 | 3.542 |
Ranked from 24 ratings. Score is adjusted from raw score by the median number of ratings per game in the jam.
Comments
I fell like this story just scratched the surface. It had an almost Star Wars feel to it, where the world building happens in the background. It still felt like it was missing some meat though, likely due to the length restriction. Great job. You created some characters to get invested in.
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Always Darkest (OPR Writing Jam 13)I fell like this story just scratched the surface. It had an almost Star Wars feel to it, where the world building happens in the background. It still felt like it was missing some meat though, likely due to the length restriction. Great job. You created some characters to get invested in.
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Always Darkest (OPR Writing Jam 13)This was very well written and a fun exercise in tension. My only feedback would be the last paragraph wasn't needed. We definitely knew what was up without you having to explain it, well done
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The Professor's Redemption (Jam #13)I really enjoyed that - what seemed like a very specific story was something else entirely. Two really fun twists - but I agree with other posters it could have been less in-yer-face at the end. Nice work though. The theme did feel like an incidental story beat but everything else was really cool.
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A Miss Better Than A Mile [AoF]Great story! Good concluding twist. I sort of wish the last paragraph was absent; I think the punch of Bayla's situation would hit harder if you trusted the reader to realize it themselves. Great story arc for under 1k words!
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