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| Criteria | Rank | Score* | Raw Score |
| Adherence to Theme | #9 | 3.815 | 3.815 |
| Overall | #11 | 3.852 | 3.852 |
| Flow & Clarity | #14 | 3.704 | 3.704 |
| Concepts & Originality | #14 | 4.037 | 4.037 |
Ranked from 27 ratings. Score is adjusted from raw score by the median number of ratings per game in the jam.
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Great characterisation of DeSousa here, to create a convincing and compelling villain in such a short space is no easy task. I would love an extended version of this featuring more of DeSousa and her motivations, and more of the missionaries settlement and eventual take over of Calamvor, so as to give more context to the epilogue.
Oh yeah, I really wish I could have a bunch more backstory. I find the Angelic Kingdoms to be fascinating antagonists of sorts in general, and was happy to include them here. If we had had two pages… ah, but that would miss the purpose, wouldn’t it?
Glad you liked Elnora’s villain arc! I had a lot of fun with it.
Really nice world building with the ingredients for the spell. Felt nice and arcane/occult.
Hey, I appreciate that!
I’ve liked a lot of the ways other people tackled “Close Enough” as a theme better than mine, but i thought my approach adequate, at least.
I loved the character and the line filthy but elegant super cool writing man .
Thanks so much!
I really liked your story, too.
I really liked your character development. Her reason for returning to the house at the end showed so much of her character in that simple action.
Hey, thanks! Really appreciate the compliment!
Btw, I loved your story!
I enjoyed this one a lot, it's a lot of fun. But I agree with other comments about the paragraphs etc - getting it to fit properly and applying the right level of polish was definitely the most tricky part of the process!
I enjoyed the characterization of your villain-protagonist through the limited third person narrative point of view. Had a soft spot for her in the end.
Great hook. Well developed character. I really enjoyed it.
Thanks so much!
Charming! The irony behind her (fairly) hollow threats is very charming.
Glad you liked it!
I hoped my "close enough" was close enough to the assignment.
That was fun to read, although it could have used more visible paragraphs especially in the first section. Love the concept and the characters.
Yeah, editing was complicated, as I couldn't fit all of it for a good bit.
Quite elegant. Another edit and this would be hard to fault. Would definitely read more.
Glad to hear you liked it!
This is a refreshingly fun story.
I'm so glad you liked it!
I've wanted to tell a Frankenstein story for a bit, and this seemed to be the right jam to do so.
The characterization was very good. A variation on a classic scheme. Fun story!
Thanks so much!
Despite it being cobbled together, I might be happier with it overall than most of my previous work.
Guess it was close enough... hehe
Hands down the best one of all the stories I have read so far. The obsession with elegance is the cherry on top of a great story.
Thanks so much for the kind words! I've wanted to do a Frankenstein story for a bit now, and this seemed to be a good chance for it.
I'll be sure to check out your story once it's on my queue!
Hands down the best one of all the stories I have read so far. The obsession with elegance is the cherry on top of a great story.