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Reads like a classic 40k story. Personally, I didn't feel very connected to the characters, not wanting either of them to succeed or fail really. I think you could establish a stronger sense of investment if you established the stakes earlier on. I wouldn't be surprised to see this sort of story in a professional publication, well written overall!

Great job. Loved it. Build up and pay off. How many days can an inquisitor go without sleep?

I had thought of a similar idea to this story when the theme was announced, but went in a different direction.  I'm glad to that someone else had the same idea and followed through with it!

Nice! I would read more!

This is some solid grimdark flash fiction. Layering the theme and the payoff was really well done.

Good pacing and flow. I like the imagery.