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Unheimlich Valley's itch.io pageResults
| Criteria | Rank | Score* | Raw Score |
| Adherence to Theme | #13 | 3.660 | 3.739 |
| Concepts & Originality | #19 | 3.873 | 3.957 |
| Overall | #21 | 3.547 | 3.623 |
| Flow & Clarity | #33 | 3.107 | 3.174 |
Ranked from 23 ratings. Score is adjusted from raw score by the median number of ratings per game in the jam.
Comments
Good job. There's a lot of information in such a short amount of time. Is this established lore, or something you've created yourself? I'm not up to date on all OPR lore and have only just started my journey. I'm learning a lot reading the submissions. This was super interesting, so I'm curious if there's more information out there.
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The Wisdom of ViolenceI enjoyed this story a lot - your premise is clever and well-researched - but I can't help but feel like the actual story is slightly out of focus. The pivotal moment of this story to me, and the part that really piqued my interest, came in the final two paragraphs: the Vrix are human, almost. The Vrix are human, but not quite. Reading the story leaves me thinking intensely about the moment of first contact in your literal Uncanny Valley; I wish you'd given that moment more space.
You wove the theme into this one really well. One of the best executions I've read in this jam.
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Lightning and LogicI can get into the tone really well and I think you laid out the theme spectacularly although it might have been a little easier to read without some of technical information
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The Professor's Redemption (Jam #13)This one has a unique and original feel. Great clarity of language.
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The Dog Star Blues
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