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Unheimlich Valley's itch.io pageResults
| Criteria | Rank | Score* | Raw Score |
| Adherence to Theme | #13 | 3.660 | 3.739 |
| Concepts & Originality | #19 | 3.873 | 3.957 |
| Overall | #21 | 3.547 | 3.623 |
| Flow & Clarity | #33 | 3.107 | 3.174 |
Ranked from 23 ratings. Score is adjusted from raw score by the median number of ratings per game in the jam.
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Well written! Easy to follow. Feels like the start to an epic saga between the Oorix and Vrix.
You kept me reading Unheimlich Valley, wondering what would happen next. I loved how you created your characters, and I'd like to visit this mysterious place. What a set up for a larger story to unfold. Thanks!
Really interesting concept, though I can't help but think there is a lot of explaining and not a lot happening. It was very enjoyable to read however and that is what counts in the end.
Good observation - thanks
Good job. There's a lot of information in such a short amount of time. Is this established lore, or something you've created yourself? I'm not up to date on all OPR lore and have only just started my journey. I'm learning a lot reading the submissions. This was super interesting, so I'm curious if there's more information out there.
I enjoyed this story a lot - your premise is clever and well-researched - but I can't help but feel like the actual story is slightly out of focus. The pivotal moment of this story to me, and the part that really piqued my interest, came in the final two paragraphs: the Vrix are human, almost. The Vrix are human, but not quite. Reading the story leaves me thinking intensely about the moment of first contact in your literal Uncanny Valley; I wish you'd given that moment more space.
Thanks for the feedback. I appreciate it.
You wove the theme into this one really well. One of the best executions I've read in this jam.
Thank you!
Excellent. Well written. Very satisfying.
You really put a lot of research into this. This is incredible. This is actually one of the best entries.
I appreciate your feedback!
I can get into the tone really well and I think you laid out the theme spectacularly although it might have been a little easier to read without some of technical information
This one has a unique and original feel. Great clarity of language.
Nice! I really like the feel of this!