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It's All Wrong!'s itch.io pageResults
| Criteria | Rank | Score* | Raw Score |
| Concepts & Originality | #3 | 4.320 | 4.320 |
| Flow & Clarity | #10 | 3.760 | 3.760 |
| Overall | #10 | 3.920 | 3.920 |
| Adherence to Theme | #12 | 3.680 | 3.680 |
Ranked from 25 ratings. Score is adjusted from raw score by the median number of ratings per game in the jam.
Comments
That was funny and unique! But go easy on the exclamation marks next time, they can interrupt the flow and that can be funny but it can also be hard to read. It's like someone is shouting! at you all the time. But that's a minor complaint, I really enjoyed your story overall.
This is one of the highlights of the jam for me. Great flow, well-paced, and well-organized: in a lesser story, the multiple scene breaks and the bold/colored text might have been distracting or messy, but here they work effectively and provide clarity. If I have any criticism for this story, it's extremely minor: I would have liked to see a little less exposition in the first column, to give you more space for detail as Graum sees all the past authors' mistakes.
I was already chuckling, but when the AI statement came up, I laughed out loud. Good work. Solid Concept.
Great story! I especially liked how the naive tone of the dwarf contrasted against the mocking tone of the daemon.
Love your approach to the theme. Very plainly and well executed
Korw emosewa! This was great, highly entertaining and well paced. Particularly liked that not checking an AI output lead to it all 🤣
This is my favorite story so far. Excellently done from start to finish. Really captures the theme and was very entertaining.
Absolutely a stunner of a story. Funny but also just a tad unsettling. You walked the line of those moods so well. Huge fan of this story.
I really liked this one, you pulled off light-hearted and funny very well. Great use of formatting to keep the story clear and flowing. The last line got a chuckle out of me.
Ha this was great. I love the idea of warlock spelling errors

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