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The Professor's Redemption (Jam #13)'s itch.io pageResults
| Criteria | Rank | Score* | Raw Score |
| Concepts & Originality | #6 | 4.111 | 4.111 |
| Adherence to Theme | #30 | 2.963 | 2.963 |
| Overall | #36 | 3.160 | 3.160 |
| Flow & Clarity | #43 | 2.407 | 2.407 |
Ranked from 27 ratings. Score is adjusted from raw score by the median number of ratings per game in the jam.
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It’s quite a mouthful, but I heartily enjoyed it. Takes me back to Asimov stories like “The Machine that Won the War”.
It’s perhaps slightly too complex; it’s too limited by the word count and could’ve used more context, but I heartily enjoyed it.
For my last question, I was wondering if you intentionally used the antiquated word “Induvial”, or meant to use “Individual”?
I did not, but I noticed the mistake and looked it up and decided it was actually perfect, thanks lol
Happy to provide my services *tips hat*
I enjoyed the knockabout informality of this a lot! It's quite easy to become po-faced and grimdark - but this was really fun!
This is definitely one of the most original concepts I've read in this jam. Nicely done. I found the professor's focus on hats quite endearing.
Grim and poetic! I might be dim, or this story might be too large to contain to 1k words! Some really wild concepts in here. I'd love to read more. I think you also managed to weave in the theme very cohesively; both in the range of the (psy-hacker?) but also in the turnabout of the Robot Lord having access. Really well done.
Incredibly flavourful writing but unfortunately it was a little unclear at times what was going on. You clearly have a lot of great ideas and I'd be delighted to read more about them in the next jam!
The prose of the character is amazing. You've done a great job bringing it all to life. I must echo the sentiment of others here in that I was more confused by the end than the beginning. I think the 1k word count has held you back in this case. It felt like I was reading the end of a Sanderson novel and so have no clue what all the powers do. I think with more words and explanations that explain to the reader what is going on, slowly building the world and processes, I think this would be great. Entirely unique.
A unique character voice and cool concept, and a clear representation of the complex technological themes in play, but I felt pretty lost throughout this. And the theme tie in felt like it may have been an afterthought.
I actually started with how I wanted to work in theme. I think I just tried to keep it so obscure that none of it came out coherent. I definitely want to make a revised version that focuses less on the "where" and more on the "why"
This is delightfully unique. Well done. It has a good flow and the character has good voice.
Honestly read this and feel more confused at the end of the story than I was at the beginning. The concept of a hacker battle is cool but the way this was written I am thoroughly confused about what happened in the story, how its relevant to theme, and what was the point of the battle that took place. I would rework this hard and make things nuch clearer so the reader doesn't finish and think, "huh!" What did i just read.
Thanks for the feedback! I figured a lot of stories in this jam were going to use the theme in similar ways so I tried to use a really obscure example- maybe too obscure. I definitely want to back and do a revision edition!
Really enjoyed this one. The inner monologue characterised the protagonist well. I agree that making the end a tad bit more obvious would have helped me figure out the ending better, but I know first-hand how difficult it is to balance subtlety vs making something pedestrian, so well done!
I loved the professor and the Abraham Lincoln picture.
I greatly enjoyed the character and tone the story had, but I can't rightly say I can tell what happened in the story. The wording and flow when the Professor began seeing and affecting the robots' database became confusing, and the ending was confusing as well. I understood it was a trap, but then what caused the Professor to be incarcerated again? And what happened because of the trap? It feels like you needed a higher word count to really get to where you wanted the story to be, but it is a good story and I'd like to see more of the Professor in other stories! You really gave the impression of a character who's got a long history and he definitely has potential for more!
Overall good work, but the ending did confuse me- and it might just be a me thing