Judge feedback

Judge feedback is anonymous and shown in a random order.

• While the artstyle + sprite work is cute, the story is lacking due to its slow pacing + writing. The writing sorely needed polished, especially when tackling such a serious subject matter. Because of the writing, I think it also hurt how you managed to execute the jam's theme because although you were on theme, I can't say you were able to execute it to its fullest potential.
• The writing and presentation could definitely use some improvement. While I appreciate the amount of animation and sprites needed to make the game, I do wonder why the developer chose a top-down, RPG Maker–style format. The interactivity didn’t feel necessary, and toward the end, the story was presented as long paragraphs over a blank black screen. I’d suggest the developer or director play more visual novels to see how stories are typically presented in that format.