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| Criteria | Rank | Score* | Raw Score |
| Cinematography | #6 | 3.714 | 3.714 |
| Visuals | #8 | 4.286 | 4.286 |
| Story | #8 | 3.571 | 3.571 |
| Overall | #9 | 3.679 | 3.679 |
| Kesesuaian Tema | #13 | 3.143 | 3.143 |
Ranked from 9 ratings. Score is adjusted from raw score by the median number of ratings per game in the jam.
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- I really enjoyed the music and story, though there were a few errors (i.e. in the very beginning where the MC says the teacher glances at him and then Amy before we even know her name is Amy), and some spelling or grammar mistakes that took me out of the story because they required me to re-read the sentence another time. When it comes to the theme, I think you did a decent job executing it. It hurt to see Amy + Ethan unable to be together, and how it's killing them both. I think it's quite beautiful to see Ethan accept Amy's passing, and see that even though she's gone physically, she'll always be by his side (in memory and through the moth that we saw in the ending).
- When others commented that some parts of the story were left hanging without explanation, I felt the same. There’s little to no explanation (or even hints) as to why the MC was trapped in the dark room before the scene suddenly shifts to Ethan’s life with Amy. While I can see their relationship growing, I don’t recall seeing much about their shared history or why Amy became such an important person to the MC. This is unfortunate, as knowing more about them would make it easier for the reader to care about Amy.
How does this project relate to the jam theme? (Judge Question)
[Spoiler Alert] Their relationship are growing, but fate decide that they can't stay together, thus "killing" them slowly and softly.
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Avant garde sekali, atmosfirnya ane suka, namun banyak sekali yang enggak dijelasin sama sekali, apa ini dan apa itu hanya plot-nya ditinggal begitu saja, pendek namun sudah cukup menarik mungkin tinggal dikembangkan lagi
Damn, avant garde XD saya punya beberapa ide cerita aneh2 kayak ginian, jadi bisa masukan buat cerita nyeleneh saya ke depannya. Thank you~
The game is executed well; however, many things are left unexplained in the end. You may have been trying to deliver the story and message metaphorically, but to a regular person, it just leaves things unclear. The final CG where Amy has wings is so cool, to be honest. Maybe the moth here symbolizes death or departure from loved ones? Well, anyway, good one.
Poyo
SPOILER
To tell you the truth... you interpreted the story very well! Yes, this story is all about symbolism. Other than death, the moth itself can also symbolize a huge change in life events, or to do real acts, so the person can change their life to a better version.About the unclear aspects, even me as a writer so confused why the story turned to be like this XD maybe I am just a regular person too~
I will plan to drop more lore if I have time, though, maybe devlog, or even a real updates on this game? I can't promise anything though lol, but who knows?
Anyway, thanks for playing my VN~
I like how the mysterious vibe at the beginning of the story. Sadly there were some things left unexplained, but maybe the story's intentionally left ambiguous and that's understandable.
Yes, I planned this story to be very vague and up to the interpretation of readers. But it doesn't hurt to drop more lore, eh? Thanks for the feedbacks!
i really like amy's character design. great work!
Thank you! tbh I was starting to have a crush on Amy while I was drawing her XD *cough cough* (cringe dev move)
I'm obsessed with that moth's drawing
tbh, moths deserve more love! Glad, you love it :3
pretty and heart-wrenching :'3 though, I think the story can be made to be more impactful still, if the writing were improved. there are a lot of things I'm still confused with, like what actually happened while Ethan was in coma, and why Renee was there with him in the "black box" (or why she has to be there at all, what's her role in the story exactly...) but I gotta admit that scene where Ethan was spiraling down in the black room was discomforting, what with there's lack of anything on the screen but black bg - which means you've done good job on that part uwu)b
Thank you for enjoying this little story! Actually, I want to flesh out more stories about Ethan's life before the coma. Alas, the time was ticking. Renee was absolutely a mysterious girl... I liked to leave as it is, but I think I need to show her more... she deserves more screen time XD I am glad that the black room scene was discomforting, the premise of this story revolved around this room after all <3 (also less bg to use, my strategy to use remaining jam time efficiently lol).
nice story! a moth is fine too
Thank you! I love moths so I created this story based on those little creatures~