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The Lost Vault of Yorrash's itch.io pageResults
| Criteria | Rank | Score* | Raw Score |
| Inspiration | #48 | 3.104 | 3.400 |
| Usability | #54 | 2.008 | 2.200 |
| Overall | #56 | 2.404 | 2.633 |
| Vibes | #57 | 2.100 | 2.300 |
Ranked from 10 ratings. Score is adjusted from raw score by the median number of ratings per game in the jam.
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This adventure has a lot of interesting elements in it. You definitely had a lot of ideas and brought them to this adventure with all the items, monsters, NPCs, etc. Layout really hinders this though as you have stat blocks and descriptions spreading across columns & pages which makes it difficult to use at the table. You have all these NPC stat blocks, but they don't list any of the most important information about them in their blocks (goals/secrets/wants). You've made the Bratyas the villains and explained their bad deeds, but not really what they are attempting to do. I can assume it's to get the treasure, but this is one of those details that helps the GM understand your vision of the adventure you are writing for them to run. They sought your adventure afterall, don't be afraid to express "this is how you should run it," within reason.
Also a little clarity on the organization of your room keys would help to break up the wall of text and remove all of this bolding. There's a point where it starts to blend together because there's so much on the page.
Those are some good points. With the layout thing, I tried to stave off the worst of it, but didn't have the time or page count to keep everything as neat and not broken-up in the end. But I can see how that may be rather inconvenient, yes. Thank you for the thoughtful review, those are some important things to look out for.
I could see that. The adventure has some great bones, it’s why I mostly focused on the layout. improvements in that area will Mae this adventure sing. I really like the underlying guts. It’s a lot of fun.
The legendary staff of Skruj had me laughing out loud. I love it! I like all of your hooks and that you have 8 rumors. I like that some of your loot is a random roll. The inclined floors mechanic was also cool! Nice job.
Love the inciting incident of the shipwreck. I understand the time pressure, but a map of the island in the style of the room maps would really help drive more player choice in the exploration phase before the vault!
I agree there needs to be an island map! It was the next thing I was going to work on, but there wasn't enough time. Oh well.
looks good! I agree I'd like to see more art and maybe some more customized layouts rather than just hte double column for the most part. it needed something to make it pop, but I did really like the hand drawn map art which was obviously well thought out. I think if you moved into a layout program of some kind so you had more control over each page you would have a better result, content wise it was good though. Good submission!
As for the art, you guys aren't the only ones who wish it had more, lol... Time really wasn't on my favor in this jam, so I had to sacrifice that in order to make the deadline. Of course, I submitted what I submitted, but still, I wish I could've gotten some art in there, I had a bunch of ideas...
Clear and easy to follow. You did a very good job of incorperating the influences. I would have liked to see a less linear adventure and some more art, but very good overall.