I think you have a really great intro adventure here. All the information is clearly laid out and organized well. You have a bunch of good twists and room for a GM to adjust it on their own. Just an excellent piece of work.

This is excellent. It works as both a decent mission on its own, as well as basically outlining the classic cyberpunk mission structure. If i had had this before the jam started, i might've gone in a very different direction with my own submission.

I am not a fan of the side quest. It seems to be completely unrelated to the main quest, and appears to be the only way the player characters can find out about the police raid, which is essential information. In effect, the player characters are getting punished for focusing on the job.

Very neat and cleanly presented. The sidequest is great, almost to the point that, were I playing, I'd want to stay on that questline more than finish the main job. I would have loved to see more concrete details, more of your world, rather than sticking so firmly to a system and setting agnostic construct - if I'm not a fan of adventure specifics I can cut or change details if I want, but this way I'm forced to invent them. Despite that nitpick, a great 'welcome to cyberpunk' job.