Think it is a bit rought around the edges listenability whise, but recalling the sircumstances this is more than understandable that it does not sound as good as other stuf you made so fare. Somewhat reminded me of the OST of 1917 by Thomas Newman (like for example The Night Window). It kind of creates a similar wavy vibe that feels very chilly but also unsettling. 

I really like the mysterious and melancholic mood of the track. It has an enchanting feel to it and gives me a slight Danny Elfman vibe, which I enjoy. It’s a beautiful piece overall :)

Man what a banger, perhaps my favorite submission taste-wise. I love the ambience, I just wish the mix wasn't so loud (why is there sidechain on the piano lol) and saturated (I read in the commments that the saturation was deliberate, but I really don't think it works, it really sounds like it was accidental). Otherwise it was really immersive, reading your story with this music made me want to play it as an actual game. And I'd be down to play if you ever do a game from it.

Now, melody-wise this track was lacking of a foreground melody, what I mean is that there isn't a mainline melody you could hum, but rather an ambient lead.

Melody clarity 4/5

Melody impact 2/5

Composition 5/5

Listenability 4/5

Correlation to theme 5/5 

Not the confectionaries! Very smooth flow which I love. I couldn't quite identify a solitary melody, only a large assembled idea, which was still very awesome. I'd like to echo Eetu where I would definitely enjoy a second section/idea/development/variation, but this kind of constant buildup is also very interesting, like the same truth is only getting more intense and brutally clear. The tempo fluctuation is cool.

Some opinions: the compression (or whatever's causing the 'wobbliness' whenever the track swells) sounds harsh and unnecessary to me during the mid-sections, as I think it takes from the detailed texture of the instruments. I understand the deliberate artistic choice at the end, but even then I feel it could be a little less piercing.

Still: awesome work, calls forth the imagination! I'm seeing that dark tone :)

Heard it before, liked it, and still do.

This evokes big souls game vibes for me, and the story setting could work for that very well in the sort of Lies of P style, now you just need to win the lottery and hire a developer to make the actual game 😄

Maybe if you continue this more at some point adding a b melody might make this even better since its just the iterating on the same melody throughout, but the a melody is nice and the track  works just fine  as it is now.

Good work!

I think this track is excellent. The use of sounds, the texture, the ending are all stellar. I love the vocal sounds and the swells you've used, and the saturated deterioration at the end sounds soooo good.

I think the melody kind of takes a backseat, it's definitely there especially towards the end, but there is kind of this positive problem where the rest of the track is so well done it almost overshadows the melody itself.

Melody Clarity 4/5

The melody is quite discernable in my opinion. It's stays in my head after listening, which is a good thing! 

Melody Impact 3/5

I feel like it's more of a part of the overall texture of the track, and doesn't stick out as a strong theme if that makes sense. The track itself is very impactful but the melody doesn't necessarily carry the impact. The ending is extremely good though! I can't stress that enough.

Composition 5/5

Overall the track is put together super well. The elements come together flawlessly, and the track has a real sense of development. I especially like the use of vocals/choir and distortion here.

Listenability 5/5

Very close to being my favorite track to listen to so far.

Correlation to Theme 3/5

This one is difficult. I get what you were going for, not sure if it lands in terms of the overall theme of this jam. So, I guess it correlates very well to your own personal theme, but maybe not to the jam itself if that makes sense?

One of my favorites so far, you did an amazing job with this! I almost feel like I want give this a higher score, but I'm trying my best to stay as honest as I can with the ratings. I hope my excitement for this track came through anyway.

Very nice, somber feel. This piece had a feeling of forever building toward something that I would never reach which created a sense of anxiety and foreboding. The distortion at the end didn't hit well for me, but I think if it accompanied a fitting visual cue, it could definitely work. Your choices of what instruments to use and where to use them was excellent.

Great work!

Peaceful and emotional piano melody! Is the distortion at the end added deliberately? Sounds cool :)

Amazing, the best track I heard so far!! Very much my cup of tea and type of atmosphere that I like to create in music. Love the piano melody and how it works with the strings, very touching and nostalgic and mystical at the same time, also love the glitching voices and distortion. I enjoyed this slightly disturbing feeling like in a good sad film. Great composition, melody, effects!

absolutely adore the foreboding, victorian vibe of the track. fantastic crescendo, would indeed go massively hard on an intro cutscene.

Sounds kind of like a soundtrack in an Intro/Outro scene in something... It's a very interesting song!

There's a lot of nice texture at play here, really solid track.

Very cool idea with this distortion sound at the end (around 2 :35). Overall really solid piece, like really tied together. Also the choirs/pads/voices are really cool that appear thourought the track. Great job!