I like the "point" of the story but it was a little too expositiony, even in that day to routines, felt kind of choppy and matter of fact. I don't really like when these shorts have to blurt out the theme in the last paragraphs; I would prefer the risk of missing what it is to being told, personally. I think there's a banger in here somewhere and the foundation is great. 

Love the routine to this one, bleak and very much to the point. Also, just now realizing we never get her name because, as far as she's concerned, Commander IS her name. Excellent work! 

home really never stood a chance once the rifle came out for comfort. adored how the story keeps letting ordinary life fail around her in small, specific ways. the pacing has this grim routine to it- every domestic detail quietly points back to the same wound. bleak, sharp, and very well handled. lovely work

It's a very familiar story, but you spice it up with the corrupted bureaucracy that allows her to do the things she does. The scale of her actions also fits very nicely with Grimdark.

That was bittersweet and though there wasn't much happening there was a definite rise and fall in tension. Nicely done!

Brilliant