Well, it's a start, and I think sometimes it's underappreciated (and I am very often guilty of this) how much of an accomplishment it is just getting something out there. That's a huge step, and you should be proud of your first release. That said, this is just a start, and as of right now, there's not all that much to bite into here. I'll break things down by rating criteria:

Implementation of Theme:

From my reading, there are a couple different angles that meet the "folklore" requirement here: you have the forest in the MC's origin world, which has a legend about those who enter it being unable to return, and then you have the loosely defined prophecy in the isekai world, where the fabled heroes will unite to take down the Big Bad. Either can work as an attempt to meet the theme, but neither is really fleshed out at this point. Presumably we're done with the suicide-kinda forest, even in future builds, since we've already been squarely chucked from that world, but the prophecy is really only mentioned at a high level too. Presumably that will be integrated more into the plot as the story progresses and the leads gather the rest of their party, but right now there... isn't much of a plot, so it's hard to say the theme was cleanly implemented. 

Presentation:

This was probably the strongest area for this VN, though there were a few hiccups as well. Audio was serviceable, with really only two BGM tracks for the build, but neither felt particularly obtrusive. There were some (I think) campfire SFX upon arriving in the new world that seemed to appear irregularly and I'm not sure why they were applied when they were.

There's limited art here, but what's there is actually really solid. I like all the CGs that we get - looking into the MC's reflection in the puddle, Wage creating his magic sword, and the flash of the neon silhouettes of the other heroes all looked good, especially the last two with their use of the very distinctive bright color scheme. I also really liked the more cutesy style used to represent the author in the direct address to the audience at the end of the build - I wouldn't mind seeing a VN using more of that style, to be honest. 

As others have pointed out, the script needs some substantial proofreading. There are errors all over the place, and while I won't harp on all of them, I do specifically want to point out the opening sequence. We get one word at a time, centered against a black background: "Dark." "Cold." "Quite." I'm assuming the last one was supposed to be "quiet," and if there's any time you really need to make sure that you're free from typos, the first impression of your VN, when the words are isolated and literally front and center, is it. 

Story/Writing:

As alluded to above, there's not much of a story here yet. We realize we're dead, we meet a supernatural symbol of some kind in the void, we get isekai'd to Furry World, and then the rest of the VN is basically just direct exposition about the world we've arrived in. There's hints to the plot to come, but we're still at a point where nothing is really developed - we know very little about our character and his motivations, The Eye of the Curse and their motivations, or even about Wage, other than that he doesn't like the evil government. 

As others have pointed out, there are some missed opportunities for "show, don't tell". Before we even get to the void and the isekai world, this one might actually be a bit stronger if we followed the MC as he entered the forest and suffered his eventual demise. This would be an opportunity to flesh out some details about the character, like what he was struggling with and the extent to which those things were affecting him (right now it's unclear whether the MC actually intended to die - there's the legend about those entering the forest never returning, and he was looking for an easy way out, but he also tripped and fell into the lake on accident and appeared to be avoiding drowning, at least initially) and, more importantly, establishing the tone for the piece. There's a bit of a disconnect from the way this VN opens, with the "dark cold quiet" intro and the introspection on mortality and regret, and the conversation by the campfire, which has fourth wall jokes about the story sounding like a furry VN. The script isn't that long, and I think it could use some more consistency on exactly how seriously we're supposed to be taking this adventure. 

There were some missed opportunities pertaining to the Eye as well - I thought it was at least a little surprising that the MC didn't have any follow-up questions about the Eye's side of the deal being traveling with them in the new world. You'd think one would want to better understand the motivations and consequences associated with that rather than taking it at face value, but maybe if the MC was established as impulsive or desperate to live again that would have been easier to digest. I also found it odd that the MC never questioned at all where the Eye was after he arrived in the new world considering traveling together is part of the deal. The MC clearly remembers everything up until this point, so even if the implication is that they merged or something, some indication that the story didn't like, forget about that plot point would be helpful. 

Last point here, as others have pointed out, I think some of the MC's reactions could have been toned down. I'm not the strongest supporter of fourth wall meta humor in general (I feel like it's played out and has to be very well executed to land), but some lines like "MAGIC IS REAL?" feel a bit unnecessary. Like, the MC died, met some kind of deity in a void, and was reincarnated as a furry. How is magic possibly surprising at that point? 

Creativity:

Like the other areas of this VN, it's kinda halfway there. There's definitely an attempt to build a setting for your story to take place in, but the actual narrative we have so far is more or less paint-by-numbers isekai. It's a good foundation to build on, but there need to be some twists in the formula to set this apart from similar stories. 

As I said at the top, despite all the feedback, this isn't bad! I'm happy you want to keep working on this and building on your ideas, and I encourage you to keep writing and building your style. 

Final score of 8 tutorial NPCs out of 4 truck-kun.

At the beginning, I thought this story showed promise. I'm a sucker for suicide-into-reincarnation stories, even if from experience they might need to come with a disclaimer that, no, killing yourself will not lead you to a better life. Anyways, it's a good hook and an interesting premise. So that's why I was disappointed to see it turn into yet another furry isekai. We get it, you're a furry now, oh no! No, that big wolf man isn't going to eat you. Yes, magic is real, no need to act so shocked. It's just going through the paces at this point. And the FVN references are a bit too obvious, since they break my suspension of disbelief and ruin any chances this had of me taking it seriously. That being said, there's an interesting narrative hook at a larger story, since there's a prophecy relating to some potential future characters, but more interestingly, the protagonist might be the Master of Curse mentioned in the prophecy. I'd love to see an expanded story, one where the protagonist is destined to be the "bad guy" yet defies that and saves the world anyways. That would be nice, but the story cuts off before we get anywhere interesting. Still, some decent ideas in here. Just because the opening is a bit of a cliche doesn't mean the VN is bad. Just needed more to make it stand out.

This is an alright introduction to a larger story. Apparently this was done in 7 days, which is impressive. The premise of the story is pretty neat. I did find the whole "OMG a talking dog!" And "What's a hue-min?" Back and forth pretty cliche and annoying, but that's about it in terms of gripes, other than the grammatical issues mentioned by other people. There's not much to say since it's only an introduction. I'll be interested in seeing how it develops in the future, but right now, it's just a fine VN.

It really is but a prologue to something bigger. Congrats on releasing a VN for the game jam! But of course, there isn’t much for a reader to get into.

That beginning feels a bit cliché but it really feels like the author has got a handle on their setting. So who knows how it might develop?^^

The writing has unfortunately lots of typos and grammatical errors. You should make sure to get someone to proofread the VN if you can.

The sprites are basic, but look pretty nice. Same for the couple illustrations!

Overall, it’s an alright start for your first VN. Keep at it!

'Second Chance' is your standard isekai/'died and born in another world' kinda story. It's very straight forward in how it sets itself up, and I don't hate how non-descript and generic it comes off. In a way, it has it's own stylization to it that makes it very easy to understand visually what is going on. I should also point out that this entry was completed in seven days, so while that doesn't look good for time management aspect, it's still impressive what could be put together in such a short amount of time.

The story itself is only the introduction and the first scene of what would be a larger visual novel story. The first scene is a black void scene where [insert character name here] has gone and drowned himself because of non-descript personal issues that made him give up on life. He's approached by the "God of Curses" in the void, and gets reborn/re-materialized as a dog person in this new world of magic. Fun to have the human to furry wish fulfillment happen right off the bat. He wakes up to a very shirtless wolf who has found him in the forest and tells him of his quest to gather the four non-descript heroes of the non-descript prophecy so they can take down the non-descript evil brother of the benevolent king after the non-descript prince had gone missing. They talk a little bit, and then you fall asleep. I joke about the non-descript stuff, since it sort of evolves into it's own style the more it's used, color coordination for magic styles, and what not.

The presentation I think is serviceable. There's some really strong direction with the bold symbols in the void, the bright saturated magic colors, and even the character designs being simple but distinct. The music works well enough, and there's a lot of text timing to add impact while reading. The writing does need a lot of help though. Plenty of typos, awkward grammar from mixing of the tenses in words, and some weird sentence structures. I wonder if this might be an ESL thing or just no time for proofreading, so I can understand that element.

The folklore aspect in this entry is represented by the generic prophecy that is the main plot thread in the story, and I guess it serves it's function to give the wolf character a reason to go on this journey. The bits that really made me like this entry were the little self-aware jokes, that could almost have this function as a parody, if I knew it wasn't trying to be a parody, it was one of those 'look to the camera tell joke' moments. "Ah... you're finally awake." being a recognizable meme and the out of left field "want to see my dick?" and "what is this a furry visual novel?" give this visual novel a weird charm to it that is a breath of fresh air from trying to take itself too seriously. That being said, it is just another isekai that doesn't seem to be trying anything particularly different, almost paint by numbers.

I would say that what this visual novel needs is direction, because it's hard to gauge just how serious you want this visual novel to be. If you're going the route of making it more serious and straight-forward, it's going to need a lot of outlining and a lot of internal consistency. Stuff like figuring out the main character's motivation. He's getting a second chance, at what? To lead a regular life? To feel like he's doing something good? To make up for a mistake in his past? Why would he go on this seemingly dangerous journey in a new world with this wolf to fulfill a prophecy he has no investment in? These are questions that you'll have to think about as you continue to develop this story. If you want to go the comedy and parody route, you'd also need to have internally consistent lore. Just how aware is the main guy of isekai and visual novel tropes? Does he know he's in an isekai? Just how ridiculous are you going to make the characters?  

Overall, I noticed that his is a first time build for this author, and honestly, I love the gumption. It's got a strong bold art style to it, and there's potential for it to grow, but that's what's there, potential. It's a bit hard for me to praise what hasn't been made yet. Another thing I would try to work on is time management, goal setting and establishing scope. A big pitfall of VNs is having too lofty and grand an idea that it either never gets made, or remains in an unfinished state. Set a time limit and a goal for doing updates or chapters. If it takes you a week to do this intro, try to set a goal of one to two months to finish the first chapter which will get the characters to the village and meet the healer. Outline how many major 'things' should happen for your story. Figure out what characters should show up when and where, design the characters, design the villains, come up with a cool conflict. That's really all the fun of making these, and I hope that you continue to have fun making it.

Good job for your first vn! You tried your best, all I can say for now it’s promising, and I look forward for the whole vn :3