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Swiss Cheese Theory's itch.io pageResults
| Criteria | Rank | Score* | Raw Score |
| Flow & Clarity | #3 | 3.913 | 3.913 |
| Overall | #11 | 3.667 | 3.667 |
| Adherence to Theme | #14 | 3.478 | 3.478 |
| Concepts & Originality | #29 | 3.609 | 3.609 |
Ranked from 23 ratings. Score is adjusted from raw score by the median number of ratings per game in the jam.
Comments
Very Comedy of Errors in a way. Could see this sort of story being done as a radio show, or a short stage adaptation with a very frazzled gunner.
walker trusting three hundred tons of gun and armor, only to be betrayed by systems, dice, and finally a safety switch. classic bad rolls, honestly. variance is normal, but this poor tank got the full lecture. perfect final click. fun work.
I could feel the pain of rolling so, many, ONES in this story. That Havoc Brother was certainly blessed by someone alright.
Really solid story with a terrific sense of tension and claustrophobia.
Did somebody get some unlucky rolls in a game against Havoc Brothers? This feels very relatable for sure. Love the subtle but clear approach to the theme!

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