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The War Against Time's itch.io pageResults
| Criteria | Rank | Score* | Raw Score |
| Adherence to Theme | #6 | 3.855 | 3.950 |
| Overall | #12 | 3.643 | 3.733 |
| Concepts & Originality | #13 | 3.904 | 4.000 |
| Flow & Clarity | #37 | 3.172 | 3.250 |
Ranked from 20 ratings. Score is adjusted from raw score by the median number of ratings per game in the jam.
Comments
I liked this a lot, good job really leaning into the robot logic. The one note I’d give is to trust your readers, there are a couple of places here where you probably didn’t need the explainer (most notably the” best human analogy…” part felt a bit jarring). It’s a good thing though, that means your writing is doing the heavy lifting without needing to explain!
That was great! Really the only thing was that it took me a moment to understand who was speaking, it could have been formatted a little more clearly. This is a very cool take on the Robot Legions however, I love how very alien and inhuman you've managed to make them. Awesome stuff!
cool story. the legion really got defeated by its own calculation. won the battle, lost the spreadsheet. cold little idea, and a very fitting take on impossible. great work.
I really enjoyed this story! It's a very creative take on the theme.

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