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San ZoolinView game page

Treat the psychological problems of the island locals and save the holiday season

Submitted by Lina (@SnailGirlDev) — 4 days, 2 hours before the deadline

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Criteria	Rank	Score*	Raw Score
Unique Selling Point	#1	4.225	4.385
Clarity	#3	3.929	4.077
Overall Pitch Quality	#9	3.706	3.846
Engagement	#13	3.410	3.538

Ranked from 13 ratings. Score is adjusted from raw score by the median number of ratings per game in the jam.

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Feedback submitted as Indie Legion.
Clear USP and tweet. The presskit could use some fleshing out.
Me-ow! Me likey way too much!! Probably because it resonated with me and my failed ambitions of becoming a therapist. And I dunno why but a cat listening to problems is unrealistic at least to me, but they're so cute here soooo... The only little nitpick I have is the Twitter link that isn't handy or nearby. Other than that, superb work~
The game looks really cute! Love the setting and the animal characters. The premise of saving the day via psychotherapy is a really Unique Selling Point. Suggestions: -- Tweet needs a Call to Action. For now this could be Play the Free Demo [Itch Link] -- Press Kit: You may want to post a version using Indie Legion's Press Kit Lite as it covers key items in an easily digestible format. More accessible images, video, etc would be really handy for bloggers and other Content Creators. -- Indie Legion Detailed Press Kit or FeePressKit is a good idea for more detailed version.
Really unique concept that was conveyed clearly

PitchYaPitch Tweet
http://Would you like to analyse the childhood of a duck?🦆 #SanZoolin is a cozy social sim that takes place on a latin island full of mysteries and colorful animal locals. Explore their inner lives in #psychotherapy & save the holiday from becoming an emotional disaster! #PitchYaGame

Press Kit Link (DevLog Update)
https://sanzoolin.tumblr.com/post/665381696219365376/san-zoolin-press-kit

Linktree URL (DevLog Update)
https://linktr.ee/caracolinaDev

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Comments

MagusEdge4 years ago(+1)

Very well crafted pitch tweet! Cozy vibes from the game play trailer gives me a much better idea of what to expect from the game itself. Itch page is well constructed and answers whatever questions I had.

Only change I could think of was to create an actual press kit instead of just linking to the itch page. Provide images/videos directly for download in the even press want to use them.

Best of luck in the contest!

PixelSlopSubmitted4 years ago(+1)

This game looks (and sounds) really great! The first sentence of the pitch makes you think "wait, what...?" but in a good way, and you just want to know more. I would add a link to the game's page in the tweet (as well as a media, your trailer preferably since it looks real nice and has great music!)

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INDIE LEGIONJam Host4 years ago(+1)

The game looks really cute! Love the setting and the animal characters.

The premise of saving the day via psychotherapy is a really Unique Selling Point.

Suggestions:

-- Tweet needs a Call to Action. For now this could be Play the Free Demo [Itch Link]

-- Press Kit: You may want to post a version using Indie Legion's Press Kit Lite as it covers key items in an easily digestible format. More accessible images, video, etc would be really handy for bloggers and other Content Creators.

-- Indie Legion Detailed Press Kit or FeePressKit is a good idea for more detailed version.

Realms GamesJam HostSubmitted4 years ago

Feedback submitted as Indie Legion.

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Puzzling Realms

INDIE LEGIONJam Host4 years ago (1 edit) (+1)

Recommended tweet edit submitted here as Realms Games.

Please click "Edit This Submission" and update your Tweet Link: https://twitter.com/IndieLegion/status/1454381616663437314

LinaDeveloper4 years ago

thank you!

Realms GamesJam HostSubmitted4 years ago

Suggested Tweet Edit: [For #PitchYaGame simply change the hashtags]

Ever analyzed the childhood of a duck?🦆

#SanZoolin is a cozy social sim set on an island full of mysteries & colorful animal locals.

Explore inner lives in psychotherapy & save your holiday from emotional disaster!

Play the Free Demo:

https://caracolina.itch.io/san-zoolin

#PitchYaPitch

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Puzzling Realms

Zwinzler GamesSubmitted4 years ago(+1)

This is so cute! I think your game is really creative and the text of your tweet and itch page match the feel of the game well.

My only suggestion would be that you might get someone to review your pitch if you plan on posting for pitchyagame. Just for grammar edits and that kind of thing :)

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LinaDeveloper4 years ago

thank you! I will definitely ask someone to check my spelling 👍

Noisy Head GamesJam Judge4 years ago(+1)

Really well put together Tweet! Makes the game feel very intriguing :)

Chen Ying VAJam Judge4 years ago

+ Cats
+ Therapists
+ Jumping music
+ This is already shaping up to be a CATTY type of game what with the intense sessions and uncooperative patients XD

- Pitch could have been smoother but it is still darn likeable. Have I said well done!?

PiecakeJam JudgeSubmitted4 years ago(+1)

Love it!!!!!!!!! Can't wait to play this demo on Saturday AAAAAAAAA!! (1:00PM CST haha, remind me to ping you on twitter)

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LinaDeveloper4 years ago(+1)

ooh! I won't be home 😖 but I hope you like the prototype!

ozbayemrahJam JudgeSubmitted4 years ago(+1)

I like to direct call for your twit, also your page is simple and tell us what we need to know in short reading.. good luck =)

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ozbayemrahJam JudgeSubmitted4 years ago(+1)

I like to direct call for your twit, also your page is simple and tell us what we need to know in short reading.. good luck =)

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LinaDeveloper4 years ago

I'm a moron and didn't realise I should make an actual tweet. Here's the text that's impossible to read as a link 😖

Would you like to analyse the childhood of a duck?🦆

#SanZoolin is a cozy social sim that takes place on a latin island full of mysteries and colorful animal locals.
Explore their inner lives in #psychotherapy & save the holiday from becoming an emotional disaster!
#PitchYaGame

gaming chefHost4 years ago(+1)

I think this tweet is very effective

Chen Ying VAJam Judge4 years ago(+1)

Not me looking for the tweet:

*oh, touche*