I really liked how you played on the reflective nature of the different elves in the opening. A great entry and one that, looking at the other comments from people below, will need me to do some further research as this is a reoccurring character. To the previous OPR writing!
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Glass and Lies's itch.io pageResults
| Criteria | Rank | Score* | Raw Score |
| Concept & Originality | #1 | 4.473 | 4.556 |
| Adherence to the Theme | #4 | 4.183 | 4.259 |
| Overall | #4 | 4.122 | 4.198 |
| Flow & Clarity | #15 | 3.710 | 3.778 |
Ranked from 27 ratings. Score is adjusted from raw score by the median number of ratings per game in the jam.
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Story of the competition, hands down. The character development in the first paragraph was enough to sell me, everything else was just superb. Very nicely done.
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The Last StandLovely continuation from your previous OPR story, it would seem quite easy to chain her ongoing story with tales from her book into a longer narrative. Looking forward to the next one.
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True Mirrordang, that was great!
loved the intro where it was talking about how the elves were divided but one again 'whole in death' and how Nepenthe was not an elvish snob, but apperently could have been, in a future, in some world.
may the dead always rest peacefully in her book
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A Question of PeaceNepenthe again...YEAH. Loved how you used the lines "glass and lies"
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Risk AversionThis was really compelling! Great characterization, and it leaves me wanting more.
There were a few places where the prose tripped me up, and I had to go back and reread a few times to understand what was meant. But they were few, and nothing a bit of extra time couldn't have solved!
Lovely prose, over all. I really liked the bit at the village, where Nepenthe "invited them all in". It was an unexpected-but-inevitable moment, turning an invitation into the village on its head. Well done!
No trouble at all! One part I recall specifically was toward the end, where the boy Tyrin comes out of the book to help. Nepenthe says to him, "There's no writing you back in, if you're destroyed like this." But then she proceeds to write him back him. My initial reading was "there's no writing you back in, if you are destroyed, like this (as you are currently destroyed)." It took me a minute to realize she meant that if he is destroyed while he is out of the book, he cannot be written back in.
The second paragraph gave me pause as well, where she goes to the destroyed village. I think I probably just read it too quickly, because when I read the last sentence ("Nepenthe invited them all in.") I did a double take because I imagined in my head, Nepenthe inviting them all *into the village*. But as I said in my review, I really, really like that last sentence; I think I just needed to slow down. :)
Really outstanding job in Nepenthe's characterization. I'd love to see more of her in a proper long form work.
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