Cool submission! I think adding some more bold text would help break-up some of the content where there is a lot of text. Page 4 is a lot easier to read than page 5 for example. I am excited reading the [more to be delivered] at the end so cannot wait to see the next version :D

Why you should check this out: an quick-read, well laid-out, interesting faction.

Style: a clean, on-brand layout with more generous margins, a5(?) single column pages and some spot symbols / patent style art. It feels very consistent with FIST’s aesthetic.

Structure: there is a good balance of flavour and lore that gives just enough information for a referee to incorporate the faction into their table.

Content: the content is well balanced between the greek inspiration and the ‘bureau of control’ style theme. The writing is flavourful and punchy. 

What might I change?

- Content: I’m slightly confused who ‘you’ refers to in the ‘shield bearers’ section