Nice work, just needed a couple of passes to help tighten it up a bit.  

I like the concept, a veteran ganger recalling a heist gone wrong is gold! But, I think it could use a good editing pass to clean it up and help it flow smoothly. The pacing is a bit off and there are some awkward phrasing and spelling mistakes that could be cleaned up.

I liked it but I felt that the characters just flipped without any warning because there wasn’t much set up. They were there, then they just weren’t without any reason until a reveal that seemed a little flat. However, the twist at the end with the other character was good. I just wish I had been fleshed out more, but 500-1000 words aren’t much to work with.

There were a few misspellings and a few points where I had to reread several times, but overall, it was a really good story.

There were a few misspellings and a few points where I had to reread several times, but overall, it was a really good story.

Loved it! Great ending

I really enjoy how this fits the theme. Heist gone wrong is fun and I wasn’t expecting that ending.