the foley in the second portion of your submission was a lovely touch and a pleasant surprise! i felt a lot more immersed in the setting of your videogame concept as a result. the experimental nature of the third section was fascinating to listen to — i did feel like the overlapping melodies were standoffish because of the different tonal? content.
overall, a lovely job! some additional mixing would also help bring things together, mostly just on any sound effects that you've integrated. hope to see more of your work!! :~)