Okay, two VNs in and this rating thing is gonna get real hard real quick if they keep being this good. Sheesh.
Possible spoilers below.
Breaking things down by jam criteria:
Implementation of Theme:
I liked it. Having the "light in the dark" reflect the darkness of someone's struggling mind was a creative approach to the premise, and I liked how the light ended up being just that: a light that allowed Remi to better understand part of their psyche. At least for the moment.
Story:
As mentioned, I liked the take on the prompt and twisting the "My Wolf" idea to represent someone appreciating themself rather than an external target of affection. The description of other partygoers as meat pretending to be people was very fun, even if that was just part of Remi's mind talking.
I liked the positive ending, and I don't think at all that the tone should be changed, but it did feel like it wrapped up just a touch too nicely? Like almost... flowery in comparison to the rest of the story. I'm kinda waffling back and forth on whether to stress that since I don't really know how I'd write it instead, but something just felt a touch off.
The Eloise resolution felt much more concretely off though. I think it's a bit unclear whether all of the interaction between Remi and Eloise's boyfriend actually happened or if some of that was embellished by Remi's psyche, but like, even if a little bit of it is true, I understand not wanting to talk about that memory, but "hey your boyfriend tried to sexually assault me" should be enough grounds for termination of that relationship. Just felt weird that Remi would phrase it as Eloise potentially being abused rather than focusing on the experience he had.
Presentation:
Really liked the visuals here. Setting the whole story as the view through a mirror with some added flair like the spotlight/shadow effect for the flashback was great as were the bits of sound design for the light "talking". This VN clearly took a very minimalist aesthetic but it used what it had very effectively.
One complaint I had here was the music playing over the first part of the story. It feels like it's trying to convey the club-style music playing at the party, but it kind of just felt grating. Maybe it would have helped to have at least some kind of muffle effect since it wouldn't be that clear through a locked bathroom door. I could see the argument that the music was meant to contribute to a sense of disorientation or something, but I didn't really feel that either. Uplifting music at the end was nice though.
Creativity:
So, full disclosure, Red Ballet has been sitting in my backlog since approximately the Jurassic period, so I can't say with certainty, but this sort of aesthetic seems to be firmly in your wheelhouse. That said, I think you leveraged that to make a really effective story that touched on really important and difficult issues and to be able to mold that to the premise of the jam is impressive. No complaints in this category from me.
Also, "Jez and Bel". Clever.
Also also, this has pushed Red Ballet up my queue. Looking forward to seeing more from you.