Spoiler Alert!
A cool twist on the superhero genre, but a little short to fully connect. It would seem like the MC is in the building when the fight happened, but the starting sentence felt like they were written from a random person in the crowd watching the fight. Plus for the secret conversation, they were at an oddly open space for prying eyes (granted its still night). Plus the reveal of the reporter at the end having a connection with ‘May’ (which I assume is ‘Sandy’? cuz theres no other explanation) is a bit too sudden. Maybe something like the MC also goes through something a find an oddly specific spot for a reason, then that interaction happen would fit better.
Presentation wise it’s lacking bgs and music, obviously. Also the little notes in the dialogue in the unedited parts :))
There were definitely more errors after the unedited parts, you could only update it once the voting phase ends i think (that’d be in July)
The theme is kind of there? Idk but I think maybe its the prospect of their future, maybe its the way they take solace in each other.
P.S is it just me or does the seal sprite barely change at all. Reading through it I can’t recall if there’s any major changes to that sprite’s expression.
Rating: 3325