Excellent maps. Bregan Manor has a great, Conan-stealing-into-the-garden kind of vibe.

I think the site description and layout are excellent.

But the adventure feels a bit too much like the players are being dropped into a lore-dense short story for my tastes -- I would prefer a bit more freedom for the PCs, especially with the possibility of instant death just a few bad dice rolls away.

Is the pact itself a scroll? It appears to both be the legal contract and a physical object, but I think I'm missing what the physical object itself is. (I assume it's a scroll.)

Very cool idea of having an army bearing down on the PCs.  Love the map.

Good job.

The maps are really cool, and the idea of racing toward a document that can save or condemn, while fleeing an army, is quite interesting. I liked the general movement mechanics and the associated events.

This looks like it’ll be fun to play, the background is rock solid and gives meaning to the player’s actions. I like your lay out; really clear and easy for DMs to follow, great maps, and well designed- sweet!

The artwork and overall presentation have a great home-made zine feel that is very reminiscent of the 1970s. It perfectly captures the spirit of someone reading the Appendix N authors and then creating their own inspired adventure.

The design feels dynamic and alive. The central chase mechanic, with its random event tables and the ever-present threat of Vel Anor's army, creates a truly tense journey. The final moral choice presented by the Doom-Pact—forcing players to decide which of two kingdoms is doomed—is a fantastic, grim fantasy dilemma. 

From a usability standpoint, the layout is excellent. The two-column format and clear font choices make the document easy to parse and run at the table. Well done on a great submission!