I really like the lighthearted vibes you went with in the story, and they're depicted pretty darn well in the music itself. The difference between your early demos and the final thing is pretty noticeable in a good way. My only real critique is that I think you could've had a little less reverb on the piano in my opinion, or mix the reverb a little differently so that the instrument still cuts through in the submission. But overall I enjoyed what you put together, especially with how little time you had.
Keep up the good work :)