Let's see, I had to do a little research on which movie you based it on since I didn't know it existed until now.
And the premise might be interesting, as long as you know how to structure it, since it's about vampires.
I can't say much about the music, art, and scenarios since it's still in development and you're trying to get help to improve it, but I can say that the novel's strong point is the writing; you know very well how to narrate and express every emotion the protagonist feels.
Although I would like for the next update to focus not only on that but also to have interaction between each character, to have them speak and not limit everything to what the narrator says.
The only negative thing I can say about the novel is that it doesn't allow you to read each dialogue slowly.
This is because you're using the "{nw}" text tag and I suggest you remove it, as it doesn't allow you to enjoy it slowly.
I would only suggest using that type of text tag in scenarios where a certain character interrupts another character or if something abrupt happens in a certain scenario.
I hope my feedback helps.
Good luck with your first project, and welcome to the world of Furry Visual Novels, dear developer :)
P.S. One more thing, I would suggest you change your username and other things where your project is located to facilitate access to readers who want to read your novel, since it is impossible to find it through the search engine. I don't know if this is because the game is public or can only be accessed through a link.