Thanks for such an in-depth review! We’re a new team, so we’re always looking to improve, we really appreciate it.
The lore and setting of Pantopica are close to our hearts, any future versions or expanded games based on this quickstart are going to be full of it, so we’re glad you like it.
If you’re planning to run it for some players soon, please let us know how it goes!
(And not a criticism of your criticism, but in case you missed it - you don’t combine an action rating and attribute rating to roll like WOD or it’s ilk - you just roll the action rating! Dice pools are comparatively small in forged in the dark systems.)