This is one of those really awkward ones to evaluate where, even though there are going to be a few critiques below, I assure you had a fantastic time with this. It's not exactly the most revolutionary story, but it's heartfelt and fun and there should always be a place for that.
Without further ado, I'm going to get into the breakdown.
Implementation of Theme:
Well, the intent is fairly clear here with the cast being a trio of ghost hunters investigating instances of folklore for their YouTube channel. However, I have to agree with some of the other commenters below that, while the box is ticked, it feels like the folklore element is there just to tick the box. We never encounter any of the folklore itself outside of Lilah's nightmare(ish) sequence (and maybe the museum if you want to count that), it has no real bearing on the core conflict about coming out to your friends, and as others have said, the YouTube channel could have been about reviewing restaurants or tourist traps or pretty much anything else and nothing would materially change in the narrative. The theme is there, but I think there are other entries that integrated it much more cleanly.
Presentation/Writing:
Conversely, these were the two strongest areas of the VN and I thought they were both really impressive. The sort of bombastically cartoony art style is cute and unique and I love it, and the sprinkling of CGs we get are great as well. The quick cuts to images like Lilah staring at the drooling Valentina in bed and all the monsters gathered in Lilah's dream got a big reaction out of me and really contributed to the story's vibe. The sprites were also vibrant and expressive, and I really appreciated that even the pronghorn museum attendant got a sprite with multiple expressions for all like four lines he had.
Music was all fitting and well-deployed too, though I did notice that it felt weirdly loud. Even after adjusting the volume on the main menu, I had to go back and turn it down further in the settings. Not a huge deal, but I'm not sure what was going on there either.
While the plot itself may have been a bit basic, I thought the conversational, loose writing style really elevated the VN and made this a breeze to read through. The characters aren't the deepest or most fleshed out, but we still get some great glimpses of personality through their dialogue. Practically no proofreading errors here either, which is always great to see in a jam (though I do feel obligated to point out that "mortified" means "embarrassed" not "scared").
Story/Creativity:
So, in the comment section for another May Wolf entry, a commenter pointed out that the "gay panic" trope (e.g., "I like friend, but friend is same gender as me! Oh no, what do I do?") was getting a bit tired, at least without another hook to supplement it, and yeah, I tend to agree. It's not that those stories can't be extremely personal or emotionally significant, because coming out, especially in certain regions or cultures, is a huge step, and I don't want to diminish that. However, in both that story and this one I couldn't help but think that I'd seen this movie before, so to speak. This one's at least a little different from the typical May Wolf entry because it's about girls (love to see the Ls as much as the Gs, the Bs, and the Ts, but they unfortunately tend to be underrepresented), but the main themes are essentially the same. Ultimately, I feel like pretty much every part of this story feels predictable - the horror-to-non-horror fakeouts, the central conflict, and the resolution to that conflict being that the love interest felt exactly the same all along. Like I said at the top, there's nothing wrong with this, it just feels really familiar at this point.
As much as the writing carries the project, I feel like there are still a few gaps in the characters, like, as others mentioned, what this group was like before the channel so we can see why the leads fell for each other in the first place, especially since, while having flaws in your characters is unequivocally a good thing, the characters did feel very flawed at times (I feel like you shouldn't need to be pushed that hard to delete a video you took of someone without their consent, Valentina. Also they had a pretty... cavalier attitude towards making shit up about historical figures, which feels kinda gross given the current ubiquity of misinformation on the internet).
I also find it somewhat ironic that, despite Lilah's constant insecurity about becoming a third wheel and finally feeling like she might not be one after embracing Valentina, the story basically makes Trent the third wheel. His personality is the least developed out of the three, he's absent from the climax (understandably), and after the two girls presumably get together he'll be a literal third wheel traveling with a couple if they continue to do the YouTube thing. Obviously you can't cover every character angle, especially in a story this short, but I did feel a bit bad for the guy.
Like I said at the start, please don't be discouraged by the critiques - I really enjoyed this one and think you and passiv_boi are really onto something with your writing and production style. Looking forward to seeing what else you can come up with if you stick with it (and I hope you do! This shit is cute AF).
Final score of 10 perfectly toasted s'mores out of 7 uninstalled copies of Phasmophobia.