"This was supposed to be a quick and silly horny idea" Yes! Check.
"but I feel like it grew into something more." Mmmmm respectfully I don't know about that one, boss.
This one didn't do much for me, but, as is often the case with the hornier entries, I also accept that I tend to be out of the target audience for this kind of thing.
Implementation of Theme:
Hvcho Capko appears to be our link to folklore here, which upon some light internet searching appears to be a cryptid based on Seminole tradition. That's neat! Unfortunately, it's also a bit underutilized, with its reference in the LARP session being more or less superficial. That whole scene is really just setting up the conversation between Ezra and Harvey, the photo, and the subsequent third act breakup, and the "plot" of the LARP session could have been pretty much anything and nothing would have changed. There's definitely an attempt here, but it feels a little tacked on to hit the theme requirement rather than integrated into the narrative in a meaningful way.
Presentation:
Presentation was solid here. No penalties for stock assets here obviously and they were used about as well as you could, getting the most out of the costumes and expressions you had available. Music was mostly fitting as well, though the intro did seem a bit off. Maybe a bit too casual for how angry Ezra is supposed to be in that moment, and a bit of tension in the music could have conveyed that a bit better. Not really a major complaint though.
Writing was mechanically impeccable, too. This was very well proofread, and I don't think I caught a single typo here. Maybe that doesn't sound like much, but I'm like 75% of the way through the entries now and I think that's the first time I've been able to say that, so I think it is commendable. Really solid category here, not much else to say.
Story/Writing/Creativity:
Merging the rest together here since they're pretty intertwined in this case. The story is based almost entirely on a string of contrivances that had me questioning at various points whether this was supposed to be parody or not. Like, some of the stuff is so over the top like the sequence of popping a boner, immediately deciding that taking a shower is the best way out of that situation (for some reason?), there only being one working shower, and the guy that made you pop a boner deciding that you should shower together because you played sports, even though this is like the second time you've ever interacted, but some of the emotional moments are played so straight that it's kinda hard to tell? I think if this was supposed to lean into the humor, it wasn't really coming through for me, and if it was supposed to lean into serious emotion, that wasn't working either.
If there's anything that jumps out as an actual problem, it's the way Stella and her mom are written, to the extent they are at all. Stella is characterized as a one-note turbo jerk that only shows up in a couple scenes to be overtly rude (which is not how actual manipulators tend to act, but whatever), her mom seems to be similarly painted in a bad light, with her not even showing up for Stella apparently, and Ezra's friends refer to Stella as a few variations of "manipulative bitch." I don't think this was the intent, but characterizing the only female characters present in your story as one-dimensional bitches came off just a little misogynistic to me.
This kind of begs the question for me of why Stella is even a girl to begin with though. Like this story doesn't really feel all that interested in exploring coming to terms with your sexuality - Ezra comes out the gate thinking about dicks and asses every ten seconds and, despite being ostensibly straight until like yesterday, flicks Harvey's nipple piercings, eats his ass, and calls him a slut like he's been doing this for years and not someone who's having their literal first gay sexual experience. Setting aside the fact that the whole idea of revenge fucking someone's parent is really messed up and uncomfortable to a level the VN doesn't really engage with beyond the briefest of nods, if you were determined to use that plot, why not just make it Ezra's boyfriend's dad? All the other awkward moments with the age gap and the ex connection would still be there, you just save yourself a step and avoid the accidental misogyny.
Others have touched on this as well, but the side characters were generally underdeveloped, if not completely undeveloped. Aside from Stella, who, as discussed, isn't so much a person as a nebulous embodiment of Ezra's ire, the rest of the D&D group kinda just... exist? They provide occasional peanut gallery commentary and contribute to the aforementioned third act breakup contrivance, after which they completely disappear, but that's about it. I don't even know if I could give a baseline personality trait for any of them. Given how much of the script is playing RPGs together, I think there are some missed opportunities for character development and associated comedy, and if you really weren't interested in utilizing those characters, I wonder if some of the D&D scenes could have been cut down to focus on the actual plot and leads.
At the end of the day though, it's mostly just a porn plot. If banging your ex's dad, with a heavy focus on said dad's signature dad bod, presses all your buttons, you'll probably have a good time with this, but I don't think it goes much deeper than that. It didn't really land for me, but I'm glad others seem to have had a much better time with it.
Final score of 8 magic missiles out of 7 other magic missiles that are clearly just shaped like dicks.