The text reads like heavy metal lyrics. I've never read something described as "a structure of scab-smeared metal" and I'm totally invested from the jump. The adventure has an excellent blend of science fiction and fantasy inspirations. This is an absolute standout for writing quality of the entries I've reviewed so far.
On the visual side, the font choice and bolded white on black background do make it a little bit tough to read, but I think the bonus to the visual presentation is well worth the tradeoff. However, I do think some people just plain might not be able to read it if they have any visual processing issues, so it might be a good idea to make a reader/printer friendly version as a backup downloadable for those folks.
I absolutely will be taking a look at your other work.