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This is so well made! It got a mystery and drama. It is laid out well and seems like a very scalable one- or two-shot: A party could speedrun into the mine or spend a session in town. I like it very much. I’ll put it ontu my todo-list!

Best thing after reading a lot of submissions: The layout is so thought through. 1st page: Cover and Teaser 2nd page: Background, Idols, NPCs 3rd page: Overworld 4th page: Dungeon No overlap between those whatsoever.

The one thing to push this to P E R F E C T I O N: Switch the Primordal Idols and the Notable NPCs. The Idols-section names a lot of NPCs only introduced later. And with a little format- and text-tweaking the Idols will fit into one column, even avoiding the column-break on the page.

(Also: The text needs a final spell-check, but I don’t think anyone in the jam will hold this against any entry.)

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Wow, this is incredible feedback, thank you! I joined the jam about a third of the way through and have two young kids taking up all my time, I'm just happy I was (just barely) able to produce something.

After the judging period, I plan to go back and tweak layout and give it a true editing pass. The layout is done in typst, which is made for academic writing (it's like LaTeX, if you're familiar) so I was worried it would look too stiff. I'm still learning it, but if used correctly, I can have extremely granular, programmatic control over the document. There were changes I had in mind but didn't get to do, including setting the Idols on one column as you mention. I hope to have a cleaner presentation (and better spelling!) in version 1.1. Thanks again!