I like the idea you pulled from the title. The puzzles combined with what I guess not knowing the system might be a quite bloody meat grinder are on theme, and the ending is a very nice touch. My instinct was “this idea is to big for four pages” and it would be if one expects a map, four NPCs, a quest to be solved and a warm bed for every epoch. But this is a Tarantino Montage of violence, unstoppable in its pace and that works.
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Thank you! Tarantino is a masterclass in the beauty of violence, so hearing that I managed to capture a similar vibe is incredibly exciting.
And you’re absolutely right about the scope. My original idea was way too big for four pages. That limitation actually sparked a new idea: I’m planning to release several more 4-page, 5-room dungeons that GMs can run individually, mix and match, or combine into something much larger.