In reply to below, Lance not having many lines so far is fine, since he isn't on our team, I think. And Jack being revealed little by little with the flashbacks and info strewn in fits, too, since he's still absent and it makes it more interesting to introduce him when he finally joins. That way it's not all redundant information once he gets introduced! (Is what I assume will happen, it might just go differently, who knows.)
Personally I love the fast pace, a lot of VNs drag on quite a bit or are very slow paced by nature. There's still room to pad and patch the chapters later once a main story line is completed and I'd rather go forward than sideways in the plot to preserve the momentum. While I agree that some things are a bit rough in the beginning, it's already gotten better and you keep improvingin the newer parts, so editing it with the things you learned once you come towards the end might actually make more sense, instead of repeatedly adjusting the early parts.
Also the new update was pretty good, though by now I really would love a CG gallery, so I'm looking forward to that coming with the next update! Until then, be nice to your wrists and keep up the good work! Thank you for sharing with us!