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I am enjoying this indeed relatively short & sweet project. I have only two things which I found strange in the fourth part, though I cannot tell if they were minor editorial oversights or actually intentional: 

1. During Bernard's recounting of his wife and her story, the name in the dialogue box for a substantial portion of it changes inexplicably to Russell (while retaining Bernard's yellow-orange name colour), but then changes back to Bernard abruptly before the story is done. 

2. While the name 'Babylonian Sands' and the recounted history of Woorugera clearly pull from that real-world ancient Near-Eastern region, I was very confused to suddenly find Anubis name-dropped and see visual iconography depicting the Egyptian weighing of the heart scene. I understand the relevance/foreshadowing of the 'weighing of the heart' symbolism that is being drawn-upon, but in the larger context that it is being presented in, it appears as if the narrative is conflating two entirely unrelated ancient cultures without any comment. To address this in the narrative without overhauling any artwork or textual revision, even the addition of a simple line from the character saying 'Yeah, I'm just holding down the fort while Ereshkigal is out on vacation' or something to that effect would make this incongruence much less jarring. 

If there are plans for a further polished version and these minor fixes are able to be incorporated, then that is fine, and if this project will remain as-is so that energy can be reserved for newer endeavours, then that is also fine. I just wanted to make them known. Other than that, I have found this delightful to read, and I look forward to what is next on the horizon with your works.  

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I appreciate you taking time to provide me your thoughts! I actually would love to explore  integrating Egyptian culture in a place that took inspiration from ancient babylon or come up with a reason why Anubis is even in there. I'll see what i can think of or feel free to comment any suggestion! It will be a while before I make a new build as I work on a new project but I will get to it eventually. Thank you again. ^_^

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We all have lives, no problem about build time. Upon further reflection and reading more of the fourth part (I still have not finished it yet), however, that second point may not be as important as I had initially thought, since (a) I had forgotten that the Sands are basically a dreamscape where things have no obligation of making complete logical sense all the time, and (b) there are more numerous Christian references that are equally as unexplained (if not more so) from the view of ancient Babylonia. That being so, you can ignore what I wrote if you so desire, since I was about to delete it anyway until I noticed that you responded. At the end of the day, for this story, any real-world history is just minor window-dressing that does not need to be as fussed over as history-lovers like me may sometimes feel. I would be curious to see anything that you come up with, though.