This one definitely has a strong story hook; would be great to see the project continue further. Nice juxtaposition between the technical/utilitarian parts (the shuttle, the canister counting, the bodysuit, the gas and rain) and the more emotional or 'human' parts (the beauty of the environment, memories/thoughts of sister, etc). They flow well together. The artwork is awesome and I only want to see more of it! While it's unfinished, there's enough strong stuff already there to work with and really make this interactive fic (or perhaps visual novel?) into a stand-out gem.