Love the writing in this! The green box especially is so immersive and neat — the first one ("you're not a player? you must be the vessel's computer, then.") won me over immediatediately. I'm a sucker for melancholic sci-fi, and this is right up my alley. I think this module would be better without the dungeon, not because I'm opposed to the idea of having one but the overall experience just feels a bit disjointed for now. If you somehow found a stronger way to connect both sections and which creates an experience that feels 'singular' in the end, this adventure would be an all-timer. Looking forward to the expanded version!