There's good movement here that takes us through a few different emotions. And i love how you bring the motif in the beginning back at the end to close it out and, although not a full melody, I think the arpeggio works well for the piece. It's minimal but with substance and I think this was very well executed.
My only criticism would be on your story itself. I wish you had fleshed it out more, so I could really go where you're taking us, but I ended up having to do most of the work on that front.
Overall, great work