I think you have some neat ideas here, but they just don't seem to flow super well at the moment IMO. The track as a whole also feels a little bare bones and could use a more fleshed out arrangement/composition.
Also, I noticed you marked your submission as beginner, so something I suggest for you is to continue learning how to use your chosen software and how to make the different kinds of sounds you'd like to make. Continuously learn how different plugins (EQ, compression, etc.) work and incorporate those into your next track. Finding ways to challenge yourself even a little bit will help you get better in more ways than one. There's tons of great open source resources out there that'll really help improve your skills. Stuff like this will also give you a chance to keep working on your skills writing music as well. Additionally, sitting down to just listen to all kinds of music can help you understand what you'd like your own tracks to sound like. This was the kind of stuff I used to do all the time and I feel I've improved significantly because of it.
Keep up the good work :)