I would like to see this little adventure completed. The opening hook is long, almost too long to not be illustrated, you wrote that part well, and it really draws the reader in. So much so that when it comes time to actually start making decisions, finding that the story is incomplete from there on really is a disappointment. I'd love to give more feedback, please keep working on this story.
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Thank you so, so much. Unfortunately, I am overhauling the premise of this story into something else entirely, but I will definitely keep your feedback in mind. I will announce when I am making changes in the class Discord. I am hoping people can return to my project & play-test it once I publish a more satisfying narrative and gameplay experience.