The presentation here is really convincing. The messaging interface feels very close to something you’d actually use on a modern phone, and that helped sell the idea immediately. The sound design also works well, though I think the overall mix could use a little more balancing.
The main thing I struggled with was getting invested in the story early on.
There’s a lot happening pretty quickly, and I wasn’t always sure how the pieces connected or why I should care beyond the basic parent/daughter relationship. A little more context or character development early on could make the emotional stakes land much harder.
Thematically, the concept has a lot of potential. If the story fully pays off it fits The Long Way Home really well.
Strong presentation and a solid concept.