So cool!! I think the emotion of the second track translates really well! Something about the strumming feels very passionate and I got a physical chill when it kicked in. The still water and the bright approach to the flame is such a simple concept, but very well executed. Hard to critique. I'm not sure this is a problem, but second track felt pretty loose, kind of a bumpy ride. A little more structure in the percussion could enable a little more freedom in your lyre playing.
I'd say track 2 could use a rerecord.
I'm going to plan next season's jams more accordingly around fall being a very very busy time for me.... and it got worse after that.
Anyways, my process generally is to improvise until I find something I like, and then listen to it the next day so that the bugs become apparent and I can do it better. I only got up to the former point! Heh.